Tuesday, January 14, 2014

Haiku contests all must come to a close.

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With an end, a beginning.  Cycles.  Music.  Poetry.  All things really.  More so this set.  A phoenix.  The contestants doing their best.  Competing, sometimes generously, sometimes not.  Difficult to know, though probably a bit of both for most.  Hungry.  Not even competitive just with each other.  Trying to express what they see in your minds the best that you can, within the limits... or even trying to find a way beyond, or over, the edge.  Serious stuff.



Those in italics are my choice per poet.  I'll include a brief explanation for each. Bold and italics is the first, underlined is the next choice.

foam

I chose this one because it evoked my imagination.
It was a thrill ride for my mind.  Perhaps a dare?

Whistling wings rustled..
Skimming frigid waters, they reached
An edge I could not.

Nice and soft but very living.
A daily driver, sort of, reminiscent of all waking?

drifting on the edge..
a cold rain gently patters,
chases dreams.. I wake.

serendipity (aka Anonymous :)

This one just reminded me of an edge I have walked often.
I enjoy it, in a way, and fear it, a bit.
Prefer to go there alone, these days, when the choice is mine.

Walking the break zone;
Will the abyss consume me?
Live another day!

Living on the edge,
‘twixt habitats – ecotone.
Benefits from both.

Toes o’er empty air.
That’s a long ways down. Dare to?
Jacknife! At twelve, yet!

This one just... caught my attention.
A man, just not completely blind.
R-e-s-p-e-c-t...  Baby!

Cold steel, razor sharp.
A tool? Yes, but weapon, too.
Not just for soldiers.

becca

This one is spooky clear.
Been there, done that, t-shirt to show.
Thankfully, rainbows aren't what they used to be?

Scattered pieces lay
Rainbow colors call my name
one step, falling, free

I chose this one because I had to laugh.
Sailor's mouth indeed, and for good reason!
Tough call though, between the two.  For personal reasons.

sailor mouth I have
pain sears flesh, unforgiving
damn table edge wins

Amanda

I liked this one more, because it is an edge that is unique in this contest.
An edge within and without.
All have been on both sides, and witnessed from the outside.

Try to ignore it
Words smacking you in the face
Do not stoop as low

Bothersome, this one.
Quick trips to the local stores,
a little inattention or illness, or... and... 

More money in red
Another bill now past due
Soon to be bankrupt

Karl

Point of balance
Life's blade the fulcrum
Win slice, lose sliced

Night com, no reply
Clock radio, com box
Baby...back to bed.

This one was chosen for the starkness.
All edges have potential for darkness, few are of the infinite variety.
Not even death, if you have faith, is as dark as the darkest of places.

Event horizon
The darkest point one will pass
Oblivions edge

Tough call, as this one calls to my nature like few.
A want, perhaps need, in some parlance.

The flight thus begins to free
Body, sprit Soar 

Rafeal

Left out in the cold
Not a stitch of clothe or care
Drifting, darkness bides

This one uses an edge to stay an edge.
It is unique to this set, at least as directly presented.
Dark, too, in so many ways.

Razor's steely edge
Draws the line that let's the blood
Hunger's pain released

 This one?  I think it's funny.
There is much potential for mayhem
in thought or fact in the notions.
Not being sure which you meant is half the fun, for me.

Nearing winter's edge
Tadpole wonders where he is
Wizened pond frog croaks

Okay...  So who did I pick to go the distance?

It will be foam.  I hate picking on her, I do.  And her poem wasn't really what I had thought I wanted.  But it opened the gates of my imagination.  I mean, I was there.  My imagination didn't even match with her story, at all, but it didn't matter.  My mind was happily in flight.  Over edges to edges, gliding and seemingly weightless.  Congratulations foam.  The rest?  A dead tie.  Ugh!  Twice!

Well... back to the standard edges of my life. 

8 comments:

  1. Thanks for being such a good host, Doomster! Your topic was way cool, I do have to say. I loved all the entries.
    And thank you for choosing me...a bit of a surprise here, but then, I think it comes as a surprise to most of us when we are chosen. And admit it, you like picking on us .. :-).
    I'll have a topic posted sometime on Friday.
    Ciao!

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  2. Picking on you? Me? Only when I think I can get away with it. Hmm... That's most of the time though. Okay, guilty as charged.

    I love hosting, I'm just a little off this time. If you enjoyed though, it's all good.

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  3. Good evening Doom,

    Thank you sir for hosting! Your topic had my mind working on many edges.

    Congratulations Foam! I'm looking forward to next week, it's always fun when you host.

    BTW: That movie clip had almost 4 minutes of freefall. Without oxygen more than a minute is pushing it. Oh and never put your fins on until your in the water and chute has been dumped.

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  4. Karl,

    Yep, and yep. I always laugh when watching that clip, and much of what comes out of Hollywood. They know neither techniques nor physics. Still, the notions, if taken as poetic rather than literal, can suss out some notions. If you believe in heaven, and a second life, then you know those who make it will be immortal. No need for oxygen during a halo. Even swimming with sharks won't be an issue, or climbing any peak, without tons of gear and native carriers. So... not completely fictional notions.

    Spiritual tech. :)

    Glad you enjoy, and joined in the race. Yeah, you know I'm still... licking my chops on your vid add. I bet it costs a fortune, on top of all else. Still... for a few moments of seeming flight like that. I'll dream, for now.

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  5. Nice job hosting, Doom. Whomever wins wins. I once won from Karl's challenge, and then handed the crown right back to Karl on my watch. It was the correct choice.

    I think we all agonize if there is not a clear winner, and then, sometimes one pops out with no by-your-leave, and you have to choose it despite yourself. It is all part of the game.

    Foam's imagery and suggestion of other thoughts/things on that one 'ku was definitely a winner. Nice job Foam!

    As usual they were all over the board from dead serious to funny.

    Interesting your discussion on the high dive. Physics is physics. Funny, I never gave that secret knowledge a thought. Perhaps, since I had done a fair amount of board diving, and from other high things, by then I more or less expected a smack. I did go right back up and started working on my technique.

    Serendipity

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  6. Yeah? Pain is more annoying than... painful. It's sort of a challenge. I'm just amazed no one warns anybody. Lots of little secrets in the world. That's what can be painful! "Oh, you didn't know sticking a fork in a socket hurts? Well, it does." -- "Thanks for the... heads up." :p

    Yeah, well. Good not to be alone in... just forging ahead. I can't sell my vote for love nor money. Good company if I'm not alone. Even, or more especially, if we don't always agree. Cheers!

    Oh? Beer you suggest? Why... soitenly! Definitely good to hear others tell their stories and have it all check though. Don't need it but don't mind it, either.

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  7. Beer? Where? Oh wait .. It's morning..
    And anyway, thanks, Karl and serendipity!

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  8. I got rid of much of that awful beer for you, foam. You are welcome! No worries, there wasn't even a case to go through, half that. There is still a bottle or three if you insist, mind you. But yeah, beer for breakfast is for those hardier or more foolish than even I. Scotch it is! *bleh* -teasing, definitely teasing-

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